Man, it's amazing to see my music used in high-quality animations like these. I'll leave a review for this because it's a highly creative and well-made animation with a few flaws here and there!
First of all, the creativity factor is pretty high. I mean, you've got some generic stuff that's kind of expected given the music you were working with (fighting large fire-breathing animals when the music becomes dangerous, for example) but then there are very creative elements including certain timings with the music (like when the quest notice is promptly shown to the adventurer) and a wonderfully-executed ending (which, by the way, is *PRECISELY* how I envisioned the an animated ending for that song to be) followed by some modest and fitting credits.
What I also love here is the art style, especially those backgrounds! You don't blow up the backgrounds with a tonne of detail and definition but you have great blends of different colours which surprisingly fit beautifully with the more defined and cartoon-like character designs! The backgrounds give a very artistic flair to the animation which I love.
The only issue to me lies within the animation work itself. You've got some cool animation like the pixie things sprinting at 0:55, the animation at 1:01 and the cape at the end. Then, as others have said, there are some agonisingly slow parts such as the chase between the animal and the adventurer, which didn't feel nearly as tense and fast-paced as it should've been. Some animation is also a bit sketchy and seemingly rushed. I'm sure this is all because of time constraints since given more time I expect someone with your animation skills to have much smoother animation, but it is a bit of a downfall in this.
Anyway, honestly I'm honoured to have my track used in this animation. Thanks for using it, and best of luck in the competition!
Beautiful work, man. It's so refreshing to see this kind of quality on Newgrounds and I'm absolutely elated that it uses my music too. There are a few flashes out there that are kinda low-quality that use my music but occasionally a fantastic one like this uses it and it makes me feel incredibly warm and fuzzy inside. I'm truly honoured!
What I'm most impressed with would be your character design. Even in The Guardian, it's impossible not to appreciate the fluid character gestures and excellent character design. Everything's nailed; the hair, the clothes, the facial features, all of it. The character looked exactly like what I'd imagine if I thought of a curious young cartoon explorer.
The animation in general is very solid, and the art works quite well. I do have a few issues here though; while your characters are fantastic, your backgrounds create as much of an atmosphere. You nail the shading but the backgrounds seem to be there just to give insight on where the character is, without offering that much detail and intricacy. It'd be a great idea to get a dedicated artist to work on some backgrounds for your work so that you can focus more on delivering your smooth animation and awesome character design.
The story isn't that direct and leaves a lot of questions to be answered. This is significantly less eventful than The Guardian, making the sequel a lot more anticipated. While you've done a great job of delivering a subtle story that leaves the viewer wanting more, I would've liked some more stuff happening!
But honestly, your story is very well delivered. So far I'm gathering that young people passing by are chosen to turn into some entity with a distinguishable colour and extraordinary powers, each one with his/her own little sub-story. I love how subtly you imply that there are more of them, by making those beacons light the skies. It's all well-thought out and with more plot-building you could end up with a very solid story.
And man, you synced it so well with the music! I might be biased over here of course but you were extremely creative at making a whole interpretive animation out of some music. Certain parts in this, and even in The Guardian, go so well with the music that they end up giving you goosebumps, which is one of the best things about this series.
Overall, I absolutely love what you've done here. My advice? Keep it up; keep building the plot and either focus more on giving detail to the backgrounds or get someone else to help you with it. Again, I'm ecstatic and grateful that you used my music and I am TOTALLY interested in providing more music for your future animations like scoring an animation so you won't have to time it with the music yourself, if you're up for it. Up to you!
While the graphics and animation in this are an obvious let down, I was really impressed with this submission, probably because of its high-quality and surprisingly catchy audio. Maybe it's just because I'm an audio person myself, I don't know, but I for one enjoyed the flash quite a bit. Nice job!
The graphics weren't too good. Sure, it's the style of the clock crew, but considering a high level of humour and great audio, I think that all this needs is better graphics. It's why I gave you a 9 and not a 10, to be honest. Animation was also a bit rough or bland at times, which is another bummer. Still, what the heck, I suppose they weren't horrible, and everything else in the submission was great.
I usually dedicate this paragraph to a storyline (or gameplay if it's a game), but since this has virtually no storyline, I suppose I'll comment on the humour, and I must say that I was impressed. The flash in general was really random, but had some stuff that made me laugh out loud, such as the 0 being added at the end of some prices, some ridiculously high prices here and there, etc... Humour's definitely a highlight of the submission.
The audio was also superb. It was good quality, and even though the whole thing was in Japanese (it is Japanese... right? Man I fail at languages) I still enjoyed the audio. It was catchy and fit extremely well with the submission. Voice acting was good too (or at least the tones in the voice *sounded* good anyway, I can't be too sure since it's in another language). Thank goodness you had subtitles :D.
Anyway, all in all, this is very good. I enjoyed the flash from beginning to end, and if you could work on the graphics and/or animation, this would be perfect in my eyes. Keep up the great work! :).
-Review Request Club-
...Thanks for using Minutes to Midnight. Quite a coincidence that I worked on that song as well and that you requested this in the club I'm in, but whatever xD.
The movie itself is very well done, and I don't really have much to say about it. Usually I have a lot to say about a submission, but this one just seems to leave me speechless :P. Nice job on it!
On an unrelated note, man, I just took a look at the low ratings of this, and you're definitely right. I really don't understand why'd they'd give this as low as a 0, 1 or 2. Some people are just asses.
The graphics were a very slight bit low quality at times, although I suppose it's a very small price to pay for keeping the filesize of this submission at a minimum. On the whole the graphics were extremely good, and I really don't understand why people would call this 'the worst thing they've ever seen'. As you said, the graphics in this are absolutely amazing, and it shows you've worked really hard on it. Nice job with the graphics. Animation was good, with a clear anime-style to it. Sometimes the animation was a bit rough, but overall good animation.
The storyline was a bit weird, to be honest. Some parts seemed really awkward, mostly in the fight with the village weakling, and to be honest, at times I lost track of the storyline. I don't think this does does its job as a first episode that well; I would've loved to see more about how they grew up, and why there was a tournament, etc... Still, some jokes were good and made me lol, and while some were cheesy/bland/childish, overall the humour was good and the storyline wasn't too bad either. Good job. Concept is a bit generic, though :P.
I'm in two minds about the audio. A lot of the voice acting seemed either too loud or too quiet, and I think that the songs could be louder at times, mostly in the more epic or climatic parts. On the other hand, the voice acting was very good, even if its volume levels could use work, and the vast amount of music was impressive.
All in all, it shows that you worked really hard on this animation. The length, the graphics, the animation, the large amount of voice acting, the amount of songs you added, etc... they all indicate that this is made by someone who knows their way around Flash and has potential to be a great artist. Just work a bit on the storyline, the volume levels of the audio and maybe smoothening up a bit of the animation, but in general, awesome job!
Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it, and that you noticed the hard work that went into it. Episode 2 is in full production now, and we're going to be super careful with the audio and try to make sure it's adjusted properly, and the animation already looks much smoother! And thanks to you for your work on Minutes to Midnight, it's a great song, and I listen to it a lot while animating. It will be a recurring track in this series! Thanks again for the insightful review and for checking it out, hope to see you back for Episode 2!
Why aren't you on TV?
This is a very, very good showreel. You have heaps of talent when it comes to animating, and like Sapphire, I could definitely picture you animating your own series on TV. The only main problem with this would obviously be the fact that, due to this being a showreel, this has no story, but what the heck, if I had to review it as a showreel and not a story-based flash movie, which I am going to do, then this receives 10/10, for sure.
The animation is, of course, out of this world. I think your animation surpasses even some of the animations of cartoons I used to watch on TV when I was young. All of the animation was extremely professional, especially the part when the camera is flying past those houses, it looks 3D-ish and full of detail. Still, all of the animation was top-notch, from the disintegrating of that cyan-haired kid in the scene with all the laser guns, to the camera movements, to the facial expressions, etc... The only one nitpick I can bring up would be the fact that in the meteor scene, I think the meteors in the background had a sort of unnatural falling animation, for some reason.
The graphics are brilliant, and also look professional. The colour schemes fit very well in each scene, and everything was drawn really well. I was also impressed by the huge amount of detail you put in, especially in the backgrounds. You took care of every single detail, adding different items, billboards, posters, and a variety of different buildings to make this really interesting. The characters looked all very comical and the character style was really good. I'll have to agree with CheppZanoff though about the fact that the character style is a lot like the one of 'Fairly Odd Parents' xP.
The humour isn't that prominent in this, but as the other reviewers said, the classic cartoon humour here and there such as the 'Nooooooooooooo!' scene, the disintegrating scene, and of course, the body odour scene at the end (which was a great way to end the showreel, by the way). Overall, the humour was present, even if not in large amounts, and heck, it's hard to add humour to a showreel with scenes of 2-5 seconds each xD, and even then, you succeeded in adding typical cartoon humour which puts a smile on anyone's face.
I don't really agree with sixflab about adding the audio of every scene instead of a whole song. Personally I think that the song set off a great mood for the flash, and fit very well. It's also one of the catchiest tunes invented since the beginning of time, so I won't complain about the song itself either xP. Great sound quality, too.
In general, this is a very good showreel, worthy to be on TV for sure. Apart from the weird animation on the background meteors in the meteor scene, which is a very very minor flaw, I think that your animation and graphics are flawless and your humour and style is, while not necessarily unique, very comical, cartoony and awesome. Keep up the great work, you've got talent, and a lot of it.
After watching this I was left speechless. I actually watched it four times just to absorb the story (that and because it's a really epic flash :3). I mean, there's just so much to see in this animation. It skips crazily from scene to scene, full with detail and some hidden references. This is definitely the best music video I've seen on Newgrounds so far, good job! :D
The animation is just superb. It's not very smooth at times, but heck, you've worked a year and a half on this. I'll have to cut you some slack. Besides, a lot of the animation was very detailed and it shows that you put a lot of hard work in it. Still, some things could've been better, such as when they were running inside the school at the beginning. The leg animations were all the same :P. I should stop nitpicking xD.
The art style was superb. Sure, there were a few cliché things such as the mouths occasionally growing twice as big as they're supposed to be, but heck, that comes with every Animé so I won't complain. What I can complain about, though, would be the fact that the characters looked so similar. I mean, does everyone have to have white hair? Lol, I think if you vary the hair colour, the different characters will be more distinguishable, since right now some of the characters look similar to each other. That, and I don't think that everyone having white hair is a huge coincedence xP. Yeah, I understand it could be an art style, but having the same hair colour makes it harder to understand who's who...
However, what was quite impressive was how you blended real life pictures with animations. Usually, they look really out of place with each other, but I quickly forgot that the backgrounds were actually real-life images, and not drawn backgrounds because they were blended in so well. Good job with that =D.
The concept, unfortunately, is generic, but that hardly matters much. What I don't really like about the story was that it was pretty hard to grasp. It might be because of the fact that the characters look similar to each other, or because of the fact that the approach to the story is very subtle (how were we to know that the protagonist waving her hands constantly meant that she wanted to be a conductor, or how do we know that she failed in achieving this goal?), but somehow this Flash *almost* felt random. I mean, if I didn't read the story in the Author's comments, I would have not got head or tail of what was going on. There were a few things that I still don't understand, such as why the protagonist was angry when she saw her friend play the violin...
Having said that, the fact that the story was hard to follow didn't ruin the Flash at all. The first time I watched this, I had no clue what was happening, but I still thoroughly enjoyed it. There were some funny parts, some emotional parts, and some interesting parts throughout the submission which really kept the viewer captivated and interested in what would happen next. The fact that the scenes switch so quickly also make this really fun to watch, especially more than once, because the more you watch it, the more you manage to build up a story and see how one scene is related to another.
The audio was extremely good. There was some voice acting which was great, and the song was very high quality, which is a rare find in Flash submissions here on NG. Not only was it high quality, but it was damn catchy too xD. So yeah, superb audio. Subtitles would obviously help here, but then again they might distract the viewer from the Flash itself (since it's so action-packed and all...) and cause him/her to miss a scene or two, so if you do add subtitles, then if I were you I'd definitely make them optional or something.
To summarize, I pointed out a few flaws here and there in this submission, but they definitely aren't enough to reduce a point from my review. This deserves the 10 I gave it for sure, and it surely deserves more than just 40k views and one award. I hope you keep up the amazing work, and great job once again on this submission!
Thanks again for this supportive, thought-filled review. This is probably the longest I've ever seen to be honest but it touches a lot of points I'll certainly use to improve on. Sorry you had to watch it so many times to understand what was going on. I'll make sure my next major project is less abstract. I was just in a a certain mood when I though this project up. :3
I learned a lot during this animation--but most importantly DUPLICATE SYMBOLS!!! So that's why a lot of stuff looks the same, copy and pasted over again. Lazy yes, but it sure cut down on the production time.
All the characters also have white hair as this animation is actually the trequel of my past two works Don't trip and This is UNMEI. The characters with white hair represented a separate cast that live in an environment that's effected by the real world. In the last two animations, that distinction was made pretty clear--but I really wanted to do something different this time and just take my time expanding this parallel universe a bit peacefully without any eminent doom or fighting scenes. None of those animations were seen by many people, but that shouldn't and can't stop a well-deserving project from getting published on my part. Meh, it's complicated but this series is more or less complete. :3
I really appreciate the review!
I'm really impressed by the atmosphere in this piece. It's dark, horrific and noticeably evil, plus the music compliments it so well. I'm really impressed with this, and I can't believe I missed so much when I wasn't reviewing your other flashes. Speaking of that, just to say I don't have time to read all of the comics to understand the story, sorry :(.
The graphics were really cool. Sketchy, but they evoke kind of a like a nightmare feel to the flash, and give the flash a really unique drawing style. The only thing that I don't really like would be the acid in the acid bath. Sure, you're supposed to make it sketchy, but there's a limit to how sketchy you can be, and with the acid, I feel that you surpassed that limit. Make the acid a bit more terrifying, and not just a few scribbles :\.
Also, I was hoping for some animation, since the only animated things were the speech bubbles. For example, you could make the acid in the acid bath animated a little, the part where the blood was vomiting could be animated as well, and even the part right after Malik told the boy that he has nothing against him could be animated (make Mason pop up from behind him, instead of just be there). Some subtle animation could really improve this submission, in my opinion.
The storyline is amazing. Even though I haven't read any other comics, I picked up from this comic only, and the story is so twisted and scary that I enjoyed it quite a lot. The cliffhanger effect at the end was effective as well. In addition to that, the little jokes you added (I lol'd at the "I'm going to take you home, hold on to my hand... Err on the other side") were great but didn't take away from the creepy and evil atmosphere. I'd just like to repeat on how amazing the atmosphere is, I think it's really a strong point in your CoolJaw submissions.
What might improve this is if you take away from the grammar mistakes as Coop83 said. It's "that's when I saw" not "I that's when I saw", "rendezvous" not "rendevu", "an acid bath" not "a acid bath", "whaddya" not "waddya", "breathe" not "breath", "won't" not "wont", "in an instant" not "in a instant", "SPLASH" not "SPASH", and what the heck is "subjesting"? There were also some places where commas were needed, other places where they weren't, and some conjunctions were missing too (if you want to, you can PM me if you're going to fix these mistakes, I'd be glad to help out). What I'm trying to say is, all these grammar mistakes sort of give a bad impression to the submission.
Regarding the fonts, I really liked that you took the time to handwrite the words in the speech bubbles instead of type them, and then type the narrating text boxes, since it gave a nice effect. I just don't like the font for the buttons at the bottom. It's so thin and compressed that it's very hard to see it properly unless you look closely. It probably can't be just me and my eyesight though, what I lost in my deaf ear, I gained in my eyesight so I can see stuff very well xD. As for the colours, overall they were dark and frightening, which works well, but I don't like the advertisement panel, its bright colours ruined the atmosphere, and I can say the same thing for the white previous/next buttons at the sides of the screen.
The audio was really good. In my opinion, Acid Horse fit really well in the submission. I liked that you had a music choice and even a mute button too. Nothing at all wrong with the audio, great job :D.
In general, this submission is just brilliant. The absolutely amazing atmosphere (lol alliteration), the great storyline, the unique 'nightmarish' drawing style, the perfect choice of music and the extremely well handwritten words in the speech bubbles definitely make up for the lack of animation, very sketchy acid bath, grammar mistakes, small font in the menu and distracting buttons at the side/advertising panel. Keep up the great work, I wish you like on future comics in this series, and I hope I find the time to check out your other comics, which I'm sure are awesome too.
Yes those spelling mistakes are a problem, I do my best to do a proofread, but I'm only human and I miss stuff, which is why these kind of reviews are super important!
By the way you made some spelling mistakes in your review :p
Thanks a million Steph!
I enjoyed this submission quite a lot. As RogerBK said, well-done collabs are really awesome, and this is no exception. There really isn't much wrong with this, good job!
The animation on the whole was smooth. The animation of some artists such as Icandraw's or JPB's could do with some work, but overall the animation was very cool and smooth. The same can be said for the graphics of the submission: I really liked the notepad style of the submission, and the graphics on the whole were great, even for sketches, although there were a few artists who could've done some better sketches. I think my favourite from all of the artists would either be MarkSW or Airfaerie95.
The concept is a very good and original one as far as I know, and the flash itself was really well done. I liked that it was so random yet never really was too weird, and the amazing animation transitions from one thing to another was really fun to watch. This collab was really fast-paced and never got boring, which is one of the reason's why it's so enjoyable. Preloader was also awesome. The only defect I can find other than the few artists who could've worked a little more would be the links to the artists' pages not working. These are the links which either took you to a wrong page or do nothing when clicked:
The audio was perfect and really added to the submission. The sound effects were also good, but man, the song that you chose fit flawlessly with this submission, so excellent job over there. Loved the audio :D.
In general, this is a great collab. Other than the defects of artist links not working and the fact that some of the artists' works could be a bit better, this is a perfect submission which I enjoyed watching from beginning to end. Keep up the outstanding work.
Not much to it...
It's alright, and I did smile a little when I watched the first part, but it got boring very quickly. There really isn't much to it, it lacks animation, lacks variety, and overall needs some work.
The graphics weren't too special. Sure, they were alright, but they could use some work. For example, the background (mostly the ground) was pretty plain and the penguins looked a little strange too. Still, the graphics were decent. My only issue with them was the LACK of graphics. You only had one background for the whole submission, and the only graphics were the penguins, the ground, the igloo, the guy singing, the whale, the guy waving when coming out of the igloo and of course, the frozen banana. This is definitely not enough to last for a whole submission, maybe if you could add more than just those (more backgrounds, characters, props, etc...). Animation was also lacking, since there was barely any, and the animation that there was wasn't really too good either. Lip sync, on the other hand, was fine.
The concept is original, I never heard the song before so making a music video for it is being original ^^. Speaking of that, the song itself was catchy and I liked it, even though it sounded a little silly. Audio overall was fine ^^.
In general, this isn't too bad, but the fact that it lacks graphics and animation really ruin it.
-.- hmm thank u
I never saw any 50x50 flashes before, so I suppose this is quite a unique submission. Slightly random, hard to understand, but an overall decent music video. Not a bad job on this.
Animation wasn't that smooth, but the fact that it was so slow and 8-bittish gave the submission a unique style to it. Even the graphics seemed pretty 8-bittish, but as I said, these gave the submission a nice style to it. Not really much to comment about the graphics/animation, since these were all fit into a size of 50x50. Still, you used your limited space pretty well :).
The concept, as I said, is original. I have not yet seen a flash which is so small in size without being utter crap, so good job there ^^. The storyline was hard to grasp, unfortunately. I didn't really understand what was going on, because of the lack of background that this story has. A box-shaped character transverses a few landscapes, dying randomly in each one, except at the end where he finds a pink box which he fancies. Sure, stories with a subtle meaning to them where it's up to you to create a background story are cool, but unfortunately this wasn't one of them, and it was pretty random. I think this could do with a little background story to it, maybe some stuff which makes more sense, since without a story this got a bit boring.
The audio was great and fit with the flash really well. I don't think there's anything you can do to improve the audio, so good job in it :).
Overall, this is an OK submission. Unique, original, has good audio, and a good style of animation/graphics. I think my biggest gripe with it would be its lack of background and the fact that the story was hard to grasp. Other then that, keep it up ;).
Zinoid is indeed a unique movie. I'm sorry if I answered this review three years later.
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